> this is a pretty quick and ****ty take lol
>
> so forgive me .......i fail
>

Actually, that's not too bad at all. It fits the song and makes it more interesting to listen to.
Is there any way you can send me a .wav copy of just your tracks, isolated on their own? (ie, preferably with no effects like reverb or anything..then I can just duplicate the sound you were going for). I'd like to drop your track into the masters and see if there's more I can add to it..especially for the percussion breaks. Possibly even remove the percussion breaks altogether and shorten the whole thing out. If ya can get me the isolated track..just drop me a note at [email]schmange2@rogers.com[/email] and I'll arrange access to my server so you can upload it.
btw: what instrument is in the second verse?
It sounds like a moog synth.