Rising

As performed by The Deltas
(recording way too hard to get to yet- I'm workin on it!)

Floating on waves of nothing matters
Drifting aimlessly across time and space
Rising above the crest of each new day

looking back across
The windswept seas of time
Memories rising up again
Returning to nothing

But empty gusts of wind

Floating across the shifting desert sands
Sun bleached walls among memories
Of Ozymandias forgotten empire

Drifting on the early fall breeze
of a New England autumn night
a lantern shines in the steeple.

Looking back across
The windswept seas of time
Memories rising up again
Blowing insistently
On across the waves.

Laodicia so confident
And self assured
never stopping once to think

Aegean memories touch both shores
Of Athens and Istanbul
Forgotten Roman Constantinople
Two Romes have fallen yet
And will the Third Rome stand?

Or sink below the sands?

To Philadelphia write
These words are the truth
Of One who holds the ancient key
And the winds began to shift again.

c'mon people- does it suck that bad?

I think you need to have an entity in your song that we can relate to. I like some of your phrasing but I need a reason to relate to someone in a song right from the beginning or it quickly becomes just pretty words. Your painting some very nice images with your words. Really*! keep it up.

right on (history dork strikes!)

the point of the song is this:
all great civilizations die and disappear into dust:

a few references:

Ozymandias is the Greek name for the Egyptian pharoah Ramses

Athens and Istanbul both once part of the Roman Empire (Byzantium)

2 ROmes have fallen- the first is obvious, the second is Constantinople; Moscow is considered the 3rd Rome by the Russian Orthodox church.

Laodacia is mentioned in Revelations- a once proud and prosperous city which slid into apostasy.

The lantern in the steeple in New ENgland is the famous warning against the British troops that was placed in the steeple of Trinity Church in Boston.

Philadelphia- another reference to Revelations, but I used it as a double meaning- it's originally a church in (I think) Asia minor; but I'm talking about Philadelphia 1787.

So the point of the whole song is a detatched look at the fact that all civilizations rise and fall.

The tune is pretty dense I guess...

Its better with the history lesson but you're aiming at a very narrow group of listeners for your tune without the history. Thats ok! It just limits your audience is all. I still think you should somehow introduce a person into your lyric that your listener can relate to.