So......., I decided to take the leap and submit one of my bands latest ideas for a song, and get your feed-back........good or bad.
We are a Heavy Metal band, and the lyrics will most likely be sung with an aggressive style. Also, I realize that many song writers here will disagree with the rhyming style of the lyrics, but we thought it would relay the message more dirrectly that way............but who knows, maybe not.
HER LAST BREATH
Poison winds and venom tides
mankinds gift bestowed world-wide
Long dead mountains gutted clean
spitting fire as she bleeds
Extinction takes another place
victims of the human race
Leaving scars that never mend
leading to our species end
Time and time again
we crossed the line and walked the thin
Ignoring all her pleading cries
we tore her down and watched her die
All the signs have come to pass
the darkest hour here at last
The masses fall in disarray
to late to scream, to late to pray
Death-counts rise and kingdoms fall
natures fury is felt by all
Like rats we're all trapped in a cage
and now we face our planet's rage
Time and time again
we crossed the line and walked the thin
Ignoring all her pleading cries
we tore her down and watched her die
So now we're doomed to fade away
erased by fate, but who's to blame
Lessons gave were never learned
this self-made hell was fully earned
A race of greed, this race of man
that killed themselves by their own hand
Mother Earth in throes of death
will cleanse us all with her last breath
If eyes are the mirror to the soul, you will see yourself as I see you