The bones of sorrow

Verse
The bones of sorrow fills the smog of fears
the trustee will never end up in tears
leaf is blowing through endless disaster,
look at me now, I am your only master.

Heaven gives above no heavenliy sky
one day the bird must learn how to fly
two will meet at the Gate one day
The innocence, and the one who pray.

Ref.
Dark is forever what darkness should be
Mindless mistakes are what we all see
I’ll give my life to make myself free
In my mind there’s no room for thee.
This is all he ever gave me;
Bones of sorrow.

Verse
Ancestors hands give lives to destruction
Feel the way though sweet seduction
Like moth to a flame, prepare do die
This is the day the Madonna cry

Ref.
Dark is forever what darkness should be
Mindless mistakes are what we all see
I’ll give my life to make myself free
In my mind there’s no room for thee.
This is all he ever gave me;
Bones of sorrow.

Bridge
Sorrow will wait at the end
Sorrow is what you can’t bend
These Bones of sorrow

Ref.
Dark is forever what darkness should be
Mindless mistakes are what we all see
I’ll give my life to make myself free
In my mind there’s no room for thee.
This is all he ever gave me;
Bones of sorrow




What do you think?? This is a song I've just finished.. It needs a little touch of finishing here and there, but give me your honest replies.. Could this lyric work?