Wow... great sounding mix!!! I guess that's what $15K will get you these days!

I like the idea of a sustained lead guitar line; I think that would add a lot to the song.

Also, the breakdown outro is cool. I'd definitely keep that section.

One thing is that I can barely hear the distorted rhythm guitar... that's most likely either on purpose or because of my cheesy computer speakers.

One more thing - where did your accent go?