The subject is quite intense, but i dont understand this part, where u say u never lied, cheated and etc.. and then in the end where u say u have to pay the price etc.. i think thats the death sentence that ur getting there [the persona doesnt have to be you but ill say you]
maybe the imagery of the cell could be damper and more rusty and cold but ud prolly be expressing that in the music so i'm not critisizing.
i like the part where u say for if we fear death we shouldnt have been born...
so to sum up i think its got structure but needs more surreality. feel free to tell me what i didnt understand in the message.
'i dont have low self esteem, it's a mistake. I have low esteem for everyone else' - Daria