just me is right. u wanna make the listener feel the song not, just read the lyrics. Writing songs is much like writing peotry. Everything has be written before and its just spin off of before. If everyting is essentially the same then why is that there are some songs or peotry that is popular? Its becuase thought the material is the same or about the same thing, its the feeling that the reader gets about the situation that makes it memorable. U got a good start but just kinda make the listner picuture it more. I mean i do a lot of those things when im not mad! Describe some of your feelings, so that your actions are justified maybe or just maybe its fine....you reach those who u wanna reach and if thats the case its perfect! it up to u really!