> Okay I've made my email available now, thanx.

Where is it tho? I still can't find it in your profile .... all that comes up is a form letter that forwards messages to you...unless I'm totally clueless and just looking in the wrong place.

Best thing is just write me directly schmange@guitartricks.com
with your address. Put 'schmange' in the subject line and Outlook will flag me with nifty colours and stuff :)

>>Wasn't this in the 'song writing' forum too?

yup. I'm delving into something I haven't spent too much time on previously, like song structure and lyric writing.
I've read up on books like 'how to write a hit song' etc...
but most of em stick to the old tired formula of verse-chorus-verse-chorus-bridge-chorus-end 3:30
I wanna do something a little different so I was interested in hearing opinions on the structure of this particular song.
It's almost 7 minutes long so some replies I"m getting are telling me the song loses their interest coming up on the last chorus. Then when the lead kicks in their ears prick up again... trouble is, the song is part of a concept involving an albums worth of material, and the fade out on the lead is leading directly into the next song so it's necessary the way it is.
I'm thinking now that I need to add powerful harmonies on the last couple of verses... cause in a sense it's a story of a guy going home after all his friends have been killed and the outrage he feels that not only has he lost friends, but war still continues regardless of how many lives it costs. (ie, the sound effects in the middle with all the guns and stuff, is Hannoi Hanna talking propoganda to the American troops about the American government sending teenagers to die for nothing more than profit.
Maybe I need another voice over where the drum corps part comes in... blah.... never mind. I'm just rambling.

I guess what I need is an intelligent discussion with some people about putting real substance into songs and intentionally writing hidden meanings that require several listens before you understand what the songwriter meant to say.