1st your lead-in shouldn't be more than 15 seconds. I noticed on some of your bands songs goes almost 60 seconds before the singing starts. Unless the listener is a guitarist or is all ready a fan, they will not appreciate what you are doing and will lose interest.
I think this song would go over very well with just an acoustic guitar and an acoustic bass or upright. Maybe some drums, but the music should not drown out the vocalist.
Just my thoughts.
