I'm pretty tired and this story deals with some stuff that I just now gained a basic understanding of from Wikipedia, but I will say this. I really like what's going on in this guy's head. The whole stream of conciousness is very realistic and believable. Perhaps more so than in any other story I've read. It just seems more...honest. Especially the thing with fitting into cliches and whatnot. Although that part is a bit more obvious than I would consider realistic, for example the waking to the alarm thing, it's kind of necessary to be make it be noticed, so I don't have a problem there. I just really like it, and it enforces my belief that you are a genius. Maybe I'll think of bad stuff to say later. Good job.