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earthman buck
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earthman buck
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04/17/2007 8:17 pm
Hmmmm......."Truck Drives By" was the first thing that came to mind, but that's kinda silly. Titles suck, don't they?

I liked this song, though. "ice cream jingle tunes echoed through his eyes" was a good line. I always have a bit of trouble reading the rhythms of the words in your songs, but I imagine it would fit with music.

One part I didn't like:

"he sits all day thinking what to do
then he realises that he's just a fool"

'Fool' there just kinda bugs me. But hey, it's your song. :)