Originally Posted by: z0s0_jpHhmmmmm....I related to the the creepy museum guy more. :D
Good job with the imagery....did you have difficulty beginning with "the night was...", I believe Billy Crystal tried to start a story with "the night was moist" in "Throw Momma from the Train" it did not work for him but somehow you got away with it. ;)

Haha, did he really!? That's awesome. Honestly, I had more trouble with the office scene. I had to edit out a lot and I have several alternate routes for it to take, though the only one I saved in a separate document had Adam actually get fired there, followed by a long speech by Mr. Kronovier which would've been an interesting character development. However, since it's a short story, I'm not that interested in looking very deeply into Mr. Kronovier's character, so I had to cut it. I'll develop him in some subtler ways if I can.