Originally Posted by: earthman buckOk, I re-read it, and it's definitely more clear. I think you should keep some sort of comparison between the children and the worms there (even if it's only a slight one), because that was really cool.

I can still see a bit of a comparison with the last line: "Gravitating to her teat, blind, mute infants opened and closed toothless mouths, gumming for their mother’s milk, but no longer," but it was a lot stronger earlier.

That's the thing, though, I don't think of the children as completely "worm" concepts. While they have elements of worm, I don't want them to be worm entirely.