Originally Posted by: hunter60Interesting thought. I agree that it's really about monotony but the line that really caught my fancy was his thinking of other creative ways to take out Richard. As far as extending the killing, well, sure. It could stay as a throw away act but it seems to me that the story needs a 'moment' to share with the reader. As written, it builds and builds to the 'moment' and then sort of blows past it. I would think that if it were me taking out that fat blowhard, it wouldn't be a smack or two with a wine bottle. It would start that way and then work into an out and out savaging.

But that's me. I have issues....hehe

Nice thing about a story like this is that it can be written a myriad of ways with a host of details and outcomes.

I'll definitely agree about the fantasy thing. It would be nice to have him fantasizing about the murder when Richard snaps him out of it with one of his monologues.