Originally Posted by: earthman buckHaha! Thanks for reading, you guys.


Well, I don't think it's very subtle. I mean, I think I overemphasized everything a little bit. My first draft was too subtle; I didn't think it would be clear to anyone but me what was going on, so I had to throw in a bunch of blatant crap like "The NOISE!" and the repeated bringing up of Montag's uncomfortableness with sounds.

It's an alright story, I guess. It certainly isn't bothering me enough to rewrite.

Well, you're right. It's not subtle but then a story like this, in my opinion, is not supposed to be subtle. I don't know that much about writing or creativity for that matter but it has always seemed to me that the story will determine voice and subtlety. When you're dealing with powerful emotions, powerful writing moves the story. When you're dealing with subtle, almost submersed emotions, then the story is almost carried on a breeze.

Kinda like if you're story is set on a battlefield, the sights, sounds and smells are going to be huge and powerful and right in your face. When you're writing about leaning in tenatively for that nervous first kiss with a new lover, the emotions are light and fast and coursing through your heart and mind like staring into the sun....both very, very powerful. Both treated differently.

Or I could be full of it.

I still liked the story. Personally, I would like to see you finish this up. I want to know who she was. How did she die? How did it affect him?

I can't help it. I'm nosey. :)