Originally Posted by: hunter60Question: Why in the world would you suggest that this is 'not very good'?
Well, I don't think it's very subtle. I mean, I think I overemphasized everything a little bit. My first draft was too subtle; I didn't think it would be clear to anyone but me what was going on, so I had to throw in a bunch of blatant crap like "The NOISE!" and the repeated bringing up of Montag's uncomfortableness with sounds.
It's an alright story, I guess. It certainly isn't bothering me enough to rewrite.