Some things are made clearer with the new changes, but as it gets longer I'm starting to feel like the story explains itself a bit too much. It's good to understand things and have images, but as I read it this last time I was starting to feel like you were overdoing it with the endless adjectives and endlessadjectives. This is just from my perspective as a reader, and I'm not putting down you or your story, but I just think that if you do something clever too often or too much, it cheapens it. I know this is probably offensive coming from somebody who isn't smart enough to really understand what you're doing, but I don't mean it offensively, that's just how I felt reading it.