Originally Posted by: z0s0_jp"unwitting" sorry my bad :o i went back to read it as you wrote the last post..you can't skim jolly works

Haha, not this one at least. But it's dense and thus almost asks to be skimmed. Gotta exercise a lot of self-control, each word is important to the theme.

I don't mean to sound like I'm tooting my own horn. It's true, every word is important to the theme. However, I could very well have chosen poor words. This narrator is not omniscient, and I'm not yet sure who he is. Obviously as with every element, the story is in my head somewhere, but the narrator has a best persona...holy ****, I think I've got it.

I think I'll play from the museum's viewpoint. I'd have to change a few words here and there.