I messed around a little with the lyrics... I tried to keep the same message to the song (assuming it might have meant something to you). I tried to say what you were saying in a less "cliche" way... I also wrote in a last verse/outro. Here's what I came up with:

Yours and mine
Walking slow, keeping time
Alone, in here
Our souls folding from the fear
Push it all away
I’ll wait for another rainy day, away
Waiting for the sun

Won't you help me see
Help me change the scene
While days waste away
You told me it’s okay
I held on too tight
In the night
And then you turned away
I gave you everything

Please don’t take it with you
Don’t walk away
Don't you see what I do
Make it okay
Break me in two
Don't take it all away
(Love me, stay) <----- ????? don't know how it would go with the song

You and I
Walking slow, keeping time
Alone, in here
My souls crying one more tear
Pushing it away
I’m waiting for a rainy day, undone
I’m waiting on the sun