Strange

[casperld]

My **** of a brother used to think i was weird cause i would sit up in my room and play the guitar for hours, One day his ******** friends were coming over and he said to me 'Listen try not to act strange, you freak' **** him. Anyway thats how this song started, theres other references in it that only I really understand, too long to go into here. Tell me what you think.

Listen:
http://www.wire.fm/board/two-song.php?id=6100
(click refresh untill you see it)

Lyrics:-

Strange

Try not to act strange but I am strange
And I'll never change so it's not acting

We all play the game and life stays the same
Caught up in words that don't mean a thing

One and one isn't three but said perfectly
There's no blood in a stone and you wont bleed for me

Ways that are out of reach, they praise unbeliefs
Crazed and insane? Who are you to say?

The wind, it just takes me away

Try not to act strange but we are all strange
In our little ways, so it's not acting

It's hard to explain, contesting our fate
Impressing the whole with nowhere to go

The wind, it just takes me away
'Til my mind is blown insane


[Edited by schmange on 02-17-2004 at 09:31 PM]

[Death55]

how old are you and how old is your brother ?

[Jon Broderick]

If you can see this, you are on our new server.

[casperld]

how old whats that got to do with anything?

[iamthe_eggman]

Originally posted by Jon Broderick
If you can see this, you are on our new server.


Dude, that's pretty groovy. I feel the same way, man.

[iamthe_eggman]

I think I'll move this thread to Songwriting. If there are any objections, let me know.

[guitarman852003]

Thats awesome! The song i mean.

[Edited by guitarman852003 on 02-18-2004 at 01:53 AM]

[finger_cruncher]

Sorry if this seems harsh, but here's my honest critique. The open chord arrangement is very cliche and been done a thousand times before. Also, your singing is a bit off (wavering out of key here and there), but more importantly, your tone is very droney. I don't know if Kurt Cobain is a big influence of yours, but I would recommend taking professional singing lessons. You certainly have potential (and the lyrical content itself is decent), but improvement in those areas could really benefit you. That's my opinion.

[casperld]

no objections- sorry for posting in the wrong section

[casperld]

not harsh finger_cruncher i take all opinions on board. I listned to some of your stuff and I think i know why you made your comment, i think you are all about perfection, i mean you can hear it in your guitar playing(which is fantastic by the way) the stuff you hear from me is basically -idea-record-have lunch sort of thing all one take- no editing but thanks for the input.

[chris mood]

I haven't listened to it, but I thought the lyrical content was pretty cool.

POV..you could lose the last line about going insane, just seems to come out of nowhere, plus there's enough songs out there allready w/this reference. I think it would be cool to just leave it hanging w/the "wind" theme.

[Edited by chris mood on 02-18-2004 at 11:26 AM]

[casperld]

youre right on the money chris, I actually had droppped that line but when I recorded it I forgot, and sang it ,so i just threw it back in. Thanks for the comment.