Lotsa Lyrics

[NRLoser]

Hey, can someone give me some feedback on my bands sites? I think theres like 6 songs up there or something, some of which are really bad, so feel free to give.."constructive critiscm" :D. Thanks.

http://www.geocities.com/norightsleft/songs.html

thats the site with all the lyrics. any and all help would be greatly appreciated!

[iiholly]

All the songs are okay, but they aren't anything really special. None of them is something that make you think, "I wish I wrote that."

[iamthe_eggman]

Hey, I checked your site out yesterday, and read all your lyrics, but forgot to reply.

Anyways, some "constructive criticism", if you will, is that not all your lyrics need to be about how much you hate someone/the establishment/authority/your life. Try to broaden your horizons lyrically instead of sticking to the whole relationships cliche. Unless you can make a unique or interesting statement on relationships, as opposed to the old "You've ruined my life, I hate you" lines.

BTW, how old are you guys? Your singer looks like he's about 12.

Oh, and you should have a link to your index page on all your subpages.

[icecool]

ha! love the pics man, classic band in the attic/garage set up!

I kind of agree with i am the eggman, need to start thinking out of the box, get what i mean? Explore issues that aren't generic.

[aiwass]

If you play fast, agressive punk rock, I think it fits welll.

[iiholly]

I agree with aiwass now that I look again.

[iamthe_eggman]

Originally posted by aiwass
If you play fast, agressive punk rock, I think it fits welll.

Still, look at bands like the Clash, the Sex Pistols and the Ramones, or even Green Day (earlier stuff). They managed to play great punk music while not compromising their lyrics too much.

Just try to write about things that you think are important or interesting, or, OK, make a statement about relationships, but in a novel way, or talk about everyday things and relate them to relationships. For example, here's one of the most beautiful lyrics I have ever read, from the song "Miss Sarajevo" by U2. They're sung in Italian, mind you, but I'll give you the English translation, too:

Dici che il fiume
Trova la via al mare
E come il fiume
Giungerai a me
Oltre i confini
E le terre assetate
Dici che come fiume
Come fiume...
L'amore giunger
L'amore...
E non so più pregare
E nell'amore non so più sperare
E quell'amore non so più aspettare

(In English)
You say that the river
finds the way to the sea
And as the river
you'll come to me
Beyond the borders
and the thirsty lands
You say that as river
As river
Love will come
Love
And I cannot pray anymore
And I cannot hope in love anymore
And I cannot wait for love anymore

There are others that fit better with what I meant about using everyday things and connecting them to relationships, but this was the first thing that came to mind.