my first song, please critique

[Julian Vickers]

hello, I've been playing guitar for a year and about 2 months, I've just recorded my first piece of music.
It is a guitar instrumental. all tracks apart from drums are played by me.

http://www.geocities.com/thejuju2000/Untitled3.mp3

(right click, save target as)

thanks to those who take the time!

[Dr_simon]

All I can hear is keyboard / drums / bass

Id adjust your guitar tone / mix to try and separate the guitar from the keys.

If you were going to leave this as an instrumental I'd also manipulate the dynamics further in order to keep it interesting.

Hope this helps
S

[Julian Vickers]

that is very strange, considering I have may guitar tracks and a guitar solo in this song. hmmm very strange.

[Dr_simon]

Im trying to be constructive, and apart from the obvious, (like your song is well recorded and well performed, which it is) I try (to the best of my ability) to give constructive criticism.

I could well say:

Yes that was the greatest song I ever heard
or
That the best guitar playing I ever heard
or
Man that would make Jimi Hendrix want to throw in the towel had he not been dead for 30 years...

but it wouldn't do you any good !

So, please dont take offence if criticism it is not what you want to hear.

Incidentally, I see you already got fed up with your response in the open forum and generally, posting the same thing twice is frowned upon.

[Julian Vickers]

wait wait wait, im very sorry, can you hear the guitar tracks in this or not?

also, i posted this in the open forum by mistake.