post your songs here and we can see how we improve it

[dvgeoster]

Hia people :cool:
If you have a song you are having problems with just type it up on here and i will try and help you

[Reality_743]

well it is not so much writing it as deciding if it should have a backing track, at the moment it has only guitar, can you suggest some ways i can get free backing tracks or if i should just leave it as acoustic fingerpicking

[dvgeoster]

the easy way to get a backing track is to get a very basic loop of a drum or whatever im sure you can type it into a search engine. Then you will the have to add your guitarplaying and some lyrics and you should be ok. Also ask you friends or someone you trust to tell you what they think of it but dont feel afraid to try many different loops and timing for your lyrics. Wish you all the best

dvgeoster

[Reality_743]

Thanks
another thing, i have a song but am not sure what style it shoukld be made into

[Jolly McJollyson]

What we need, is a giant fighting robot
With machine gun arms, and laser beam eyes
What we need, is a giant fighting robot
With metallic boots of gargantuan size

Metal Helmets made of steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with grease
Robots have no time for peace.

What they've got, is giant fighting robot
A giant fighting robot to melt all our minds
What they've sent, is an evil fighting robot
To distract our thoughts, and draw our eyes

Metal Helmets made of Steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with Grease
Robot have no time for peace

What we need is a giant fighting robot
To bring those hypnotists to their knees
What we need is our very own fighting robot
Our very own fighting robot just like the Japanese

Iron boosters fire the flame
Robots feel no woe nor shame
Flying forward to assault
Fighting robots have no faults

What they've got is a giant fighting robot
with laserbeam eyes, and machine gun hands
What they've done, is they took their giant robot
And mass distributed to foreign lands

Metal Helmets made of Steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with Grease
Robots have no time for peace

We need to build a giant fighting robot
To bring our enemies to their knees
We needed to build a giant fighting robot
but they beat us to it, those clever Japanese.

So let's go build our giant fighting robot
with nuts and bolts, and everything else
Yes let's go build, our giant fighting robot
And place it on the Toys-R-Us Shelves!

[ericthecableguy]

^^^ Everyone who hasn't heard this must listen to this song! ^^^^

[Hamberg]

well it is not so much writing it as deciding if it should have a backing track, at the moment it has only guitar, can you suggest some ways i can get free backing tracks or if i should just leave it as acoustic fingerpicking

Leave it as acoutic fiinger picking or write the backing tracks yourself if you want to be original.

[magicninja]

^^^ Everyone who hasn't heard this must listen to this song! ^^^^

I want!I want! But where?

[Jolly McJollyson]

I want!I want! But where?
Haha, I think he's referring to the link in my signature...

[iamthe_eggman]

What we need, is a giant fighting robot
With machine gun arms, and laser beam eyes
What we need, is a giant fighting robot
With metallic boots of gargantuan size

Metal Helmets made of steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with grease
Robots have no time for peace.

What they've got, is giant fighting robot
A giant fighting robot to melt all our minds
What they've sent, is an evil fighting robot
To distract our thoughts, and draw our eyes

Metal Helmets made of Steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with Grease
Robot have no time for peace

What we need is a giant fighting robot
To bring those hypnotists to their knees
What we need is our very own fighting robot
Our very own fighting robot just like the Japanese

Iron boosters fire the flame
Robots feel no woe nor shame
Flying forward to assault
Fighting robots have no faults

What they've got is a giant fighting robot
with laserbeam eyes, and machine gun hands
What they've done, is they took their giant robot
And mass distributed to foreign lands

Metal Helmets made of Steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with Grease
Robots have no time for peace

We need to build a giant fighting robot
To bring our enemies to their knees
We needed to build a giant fighting robot
but they beat us to it, those clever Japanese.

So let's go build our giant fighting robot
with nuts and bolts, and everything else
Yes let's go build, our giant fighting robot
And place it on the Toys-R-Us Shelves!

This song could be improved by:


Replacing all references to "a giant fighting robot" to "for the people of the world to truly learn to understand each other"
Increasing the bpm to 245
Adding 7 more choruses to serve as an outro
Eliminate any guitar solos

[Jolly McJollyson]

This song could be improved by:


Replacing all references to "a giant fighting robot" to "for the people of the world to truly learn to understand each other"
Increasing the bpm to 245
Adding 7 more choruses to serve as an outro
Eliminate any guitar solos

People all over the world!

JOIN HANDS!

START A LOVE TRAIN!

LOVE TRAIN!

[magicninja]

We definatley need giant fighting robots and a boxing rabbi named Steinburg.

[Blues_Man]

Giant Fighting robot will go platinum...one day.... :rolleyes:

And then a famous rapper will steal the bass line, and turn it to crap...

[dvgeoster]

Thanks
another thing, i have a song but am not sure what style it shoukld be made into
Well the only thing i can ask you to do is go to:

http://www.guitartricks.com/forum/showthread.php?t=10385&page=2&pp=7

where i said about moods in a song (its on page 2)

[xmetalcorex]

my friend wrote this when... tell me what you think. ur interpretation and any suggestions or improvements needed




drunkards

feeling drunk, mind is naked
everything seems down and blue
every meeting of mind meets nothing
listening thoughts all uncertain

small thoughts turns to silence
liquor tastes a big depression
mere minds makes connections
though something inside yells distraction

this is how these words flow
fragile minds creates deeper meanings
conformity of thoughts emanates on me
thats how drunkard minds sought insanity

lefty words seems low and fragile
like every struggle finds peace and rest
scars of pleasure triggers intentions
making us more hard to handle




sounds crap .......bwahahahaha


tell me what u think



untitled
suggestions / improvements please.......................................


untitled

third world chaos, nation choked in poverty
nowhere to run, hypocrisy of man
gorruption is rampant, death of every infant
woman battered, blood scattered
power abuse, justice no use
what shall we do? repent or annihilate
forgive or avenge

fraud dwells in everymind
amassed all fortune the earth possessed
ignoring the cries of people in pain
blasphemy coming out in evry tongue
what shall we do? believe or die
oblivion or live

i foresee the tomorow of the world
events that will happen after yesterday
wars imminent, sufferings will rise
vultures devoured cadavers

this is the time for repentance
this is the time of vengeance
death be by my side
death waving like a high tide


future devastation, miserable life ended
all out war, no more left
got to start anew,its too late
no one left, evrybody caught in a bait


this is the time for repentance
this is the time of vengeance
death be by my side
death waving like a high tide


god have mercy
people gone crazy
no more hope
will you please tell me my pope

[hamercx4qplayer]

howdy yall id first like to say what a great site very informal
and lets get to the piont shall we i havent been writting to long and heres one i wrote for my girlfriend a year ago iv let a few people hearit but some like it and some laugh i havent played it for her yet it just dont sound right to me i think its **** but enuff with the jabbering




Sweet Innocence

Performed by: bad habits
Standard tuning

Look at the girl in the corner
Lookin so sweet in her innocence
I want to be with her
She looks so sweet in her innocence

Its so nice to be with you
The way you look tonight
The way you hold me tight
In the past
But that was long ago


Look at the girl in the corner
Lookin so sweet in her innocence
I want to be with her
She looks so sweet in her innocence

Repeat chorus

[Fenderalltheway]

ok, well i have to songs, both my friend wrote and i think were gana do with my band so here it is...

# 1
Life is like a mountain

Verse 1: Life is like a mountain
three ways to go up,
The easy way and the hard way, and the right way to go up.

Chorus:Life is like i mountain, start at the bottum and go to the top
and go all the way!

verse 2: life is like a mountain, three ways to go up,
sometimes the hard way, will take you right through.

Chorus 2


verse 3: thats the story, of life, the way you should live it, thats the path i plan to take up the mountain.

Chorus, then you fade out.
THe main riff is g-------, em-------, then the second part of the verse would go em-,dm-,cm-, then back to main riff. Umm,for the second part you just kind slide down the fret board.

[Fenderalltheway]

ok, so the second one its like about what the world will be like...if we dont work together, you know, well here it is

main riff a#,g#f,each strummed 8 times then f twice, and go back to g# and strum once. and then the chorus would be d3 three times, c# three times, and g# three times, then cminor#, and you do that three times.im kinda working on a bridge, so here are the words.

verse 1: the world is becoming a piece of trash, promises of hope will never last
The war is on, and we cant do a thing, untill we hear the gunshots ring,
This is the world were walking into,
alone we walk in, together we gata come through

chorus 1: stop all the global warming
stop all the wars at hand
this is what we gata do to same the world,
and the race of man

well, me and my friend wrote a second verse, but we trashed it, so, well i wana see what you guys think about our two songs(remember he wrote them not me...hehe) so post some feedback

thanks

[Fenderalltheway]

What we need, is a giant fighting robot
With machine gun arms, and laser beam eyes
What we need, is a giant fighting robot
With metallic boots of gargantuan size

Metal Helmets made of steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with grease
Robots have no time for peace.

What they've got, is giant fighting robot
A giant fighting robot to melt all our minds
What they've sent, is an evil fighting robot
To distract our thoughts, and draw our eyes

Metal Helmets made of Steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with Grease
Robot have no time for peace

What we need is a giant fighting robot
To bring those hypnotists to their knees
What we need is our very own fighting robot
Our very own fighting robot just like the Japanese

Iron boosters fire the flame
Robots feel no woe nor shame
Flying forward to assault
Fighting robots have no faults

What they've got is a giant fighting robot
with laserbeam eyes, and machine gun hands
What they've done, is they took their giant robot
And mass distributed to foreign lands

Metal Helmets made of Steel
Robots have no time to heal
Lubricate their joints with Grease
Robots have no time for peace

We need to build a giant fighting robot
To bring our enemies to their knees
We needed to build a giant fighting robot
but they beat us to it, those clever Japanese.

So let's go build our giant fighting robot
with nuts and bolts, and everything else
Yes let's go build, our giant fighting robot
And place it on the Toys-R-Us Shelves!


Jolly, this song is amazing, this s like the fourth time ive lisened im listening to the boxing rabbi stienberg...you have to post the chords for this song!!!!!

[g----rant]

here's my song, i tend to write stories in a way, this one would make a good horror film, but i think it was already done in scream, o well, theres no song yet...:

straight line:

yesterday i knew where i was in this life

i knew to hold back anger and steady myer's knife

even when i felt like mike and wanted his spike

i knew that men hiding daggers rn't things people like



but life got harder living try as i might

i went to bed and stabbed the pillow every night

i saw the feathers and thought of trusty old leathers

and the way he let out his rage shredding people to teathers



how can you expect me to walk the straight line,

after you've seen the twisted things that go on in my mind?

send me away, today, before i lose my way

help me be the man and live the life i led yesterday



haloween friday 13th, elm and wolf creek,

these names and their horrors turned me into a freak

i don't wanna cause pain, but i'll get it again

i'll see freddy and jason then go cause people pain



how can you expect me to walk the straight line,

after you've seen the twisted things that go on in my mind?

send me away, today, before i lose my way

help me be the man and live the life i led yesterday



you know all the things that i'm capable of,

so why don't you call the cops and get me sent off?

you know i'm a timebomb ticking it down,

until i go blank and go rampaging with michael's bleak frown



you think there still a chance that i might be fit

to stay in society when you know i'm engulfed in this ****

you know i'm not, i know you love me but you've got

to do away with me before i untie your throats knot



how can you expect me to walk the straight line,

after you've seen the twisted things that go on in my mind?

send me away, today, before i lose my way

help me be the man and live the life i led yesterday



hmm, hows that? sorta insane and sick but i thought a song based on horror films was pretty cool...

[Guitar Baha'i]

Peace be unto you.

I have a very hard time writing songs, but I wouldn't say that I am completely anti-creative. Most of my music always ends up being "progressive" to some extent, though not in lines with bands like Yes, Gentle Giant, or Dream Theater.

I have some songs on my Myspace page, and I feel that 3 out of the 4 on there could be a lot better. One of the songs is all electronic loops, so it's none of my own musical ability.

Matt's Music (http://www.myspace.com/MattHaase)

The songs that I am having problems with are Before the end of summer, Progress, and The Lightest Hour.

I would appreciate any advice. Thank you.

Peace.

~ Matt

[guitarboy313]

I got good acoustic song. Wrote it when I firsted started to write so sort of sucky.

Standard tuning

Looking For:
Don't tell me the truth
That you were the one
That killed me with that gun
You never said it was done
But before I go to the other side of life
I want everyone to notice you

Their looking for you now
They never saw you before

That goverment job realy did pay off
But in the end of it all
You will be prosecuted by the goverment


I am looking forward to your feedback please I realy want to finish it.

[skunk_overload]

this is my poem...

Nobody Left
Ian / Nov. 2, 2005


Everything is flashing back to my brain.
I’m scared and my bodies start to drain.
The comets in the sky falls like rain.
Just like me as the crushing airplane

Lights are gone out and losing my sight!!!
Now I’m alone, I’m down I must continue the fight?
Contradictions is everywhere I can’t see the light
The Black is separated from White.

I hate to see your face smiling at me…
I still murder you in my dreams
Can’t you feel it? Look into my eyes…
Save your breath, I will send you in your grave

My blood is boiling like a magma underground
You’ll feel it up to the last drop of your blood
This is not a perfect world for you and for me
My Evil minds attacks your virgin souls

This is the last time you’ll know
You’re dead and not breathing
Your heart and lungs stops pumping
Nobody left! Just a decomposed body