Challenge for Jolly!

[Andrew Sa]

Jolly, since you are so amazingly good and speedy at penning lyrics, I am putting a challenge to you...
I will give tou two days to write a new song.."Easy!" I hear you exclaim...but tis not that simple, alas...there is a catch...You have to write this song on my terms...here they are.

1)The song can have any structure, but has to exceed 120 words.
2)The song has to feature a chorus.
3) The song must include the words...rabbit, apple, oak tree and evangelist!

Your time starts now...lets see what you have by Wednesday evening.

Good Luck, we all know you can do it!

[iiholly]

Are you trying to get jolly to do your homework for you?

[Jolly McJollyson]

I'll bang it out, but I'm pretty busy this week. Give me until Thursday and you've got a deal.

[Andrew Sa]

Right, till Thursday you have.

Then maybe we can all judge you on a scale of 1-10, I will think of various points on which everyone can judge you...I'll post them later.

[Andrew Sa]

Right...Jolly is going to post his song...then I want you guys to rate him out of 10, with 10 being the best.
Give him a seperate rating for:
1)subject (and how he managed to cleverly use the given words)
2)Syllabel count(does it seem these lines could work in the same melody?)
3)credibility(does it seem he just lined up rhyming words?
and finally
4)future prospects(is this a song you think you would hear on a radio or even purchase?)

After all of this, you will give a total score for the song...

Seeing that the thread started as a bit of a joke, and it may well be difficult to write a non-comedic song involving all four of the words I included, extra points may and should be allocated if Jolly actually turns out a serious, non-Tenacious D-type song. :p

[Cryptic Excretions]

Right...Jolly is going to post his song...then I want you guys to rate him out of 10, with 10 being the best.
Give him a seperate rating for:
1)subject (and how he managed to cleverly use the given words)
2)Syllabel count(does it seem these lines could work in the same melody?)
3)credibility(does it seem he just lined up rhyming words?
and finally
4)future prospects(is this a song you think you would hear on a radio or even purchase?)

I dunno, some of the things I've paid for... I'm sure that buying a song with the above description for me wouldn't be too bad.

[Jolly McJollyson]

Jolly, since you are so amazingly good and speedy at penning lyrics, I am putting a challenge to you...
I will give tou two days to write a new song.."Easy!" I hear you exclaim...but tis not that simple, alas...there is a catch...You have to write this song on my terms...here they are.

1)The song can have any structure, but has to exceed 120 words.
2)The song has to feature a chorus.
3) The song must include the words...rabbit, apple, oak tree and evangelist!

Your time starts now...lets see what you have by Wednesday evening.

Good Luck, we all know you can do it!
Here it is, my rockabilly crapsterpiece.


Welllll....Give me a minute, nay an hour to swing
Give me a second to jiiiiiive
But don't you put a limit on my rock and roll
Baby it keeps me aliiiive

Cuz it's one...two...three four five
Let's get ready to roll
Steady so steady
like a rabbit we're ready
According to the latest polls
Cuz it's one...two...three four five
A six seven eight nine please don't hide
A let's rock
roll
and do it all toniiiiiggght

Wellll....Hand me an apple or a plum or a peach
I'm hungerin' and it's the woooorst
But no matter how hungry and tired I get
Rock N' Roll will quench my thiiiirst

Cuz it's one...two...three four five
Let's get ready to roll
Steady so steady
like a rabbit we're ready
According to the latest polls
Cuz it's one...two...three four five
Stronger than an oak tree rock never dies
A let's rock
roll
and do it all toniiiiiggght

Now don't get me wrong...
I'm honest on this
I'm no hypocritical evangelist
A let's Rock
roll
and do it all toniiiiiigggght

[Meta]

wow once again the master has masterfully posted a masterful peice

a masterful

10

10

10

and a 10


from me =)

[x0o_BurnOut_o0x]

lmao, i knew u could do that, piece of cake. Its not as good as some of your songs but im afraid ur the only one here who could make rabbit, apple, oak tree, and evanglist work into a song. I think im gonna go through and count the number of songs you have posted and see if there is anyone who can match it...

[Andrew Sa]

I am amazed, that could almost have been an actuall Billy Ray Cirus song...incredible!
I'll give you 10's for the lot hey...except please do explain how a rabbit is ready...I am trying to see if you have any metaphor intended, or if you just had to use the word rabbit?
and you did it with time to spare...
10

[Jolly McJollyson]

please do explain how a rabbit is ready...I am trying to see if you have any metaphor intended, or if you just had to use the word rabbit?
Rabbits are always on the go, plus they have sex at the drop of a hat. Thus, rabbits are ready to go. Also I wanted to use the word rabbit, haha.

[Andrew Sa]

either way, well done Mr McJollyson...you have my undying respect (and a big piece of CHEESE).

maybe one day I'll put one of mine songs up on here, just must stop being so lazy and type them out.

[Raskolnikov]

please do explain how a rabbit is ready...I am trying to see if you have any metaphor intended, or if you just had to use the word rabbit?
Rabbits are always on the go, plus they have sex at the drop of a hat. Thus, rabbits are ready to go. Also I wanted to use the word rabbit, haha.
She don't like her eggs all runny
She thinks crossin' her legs is funny
She looks down her nose at money
She gets it on like the Easter Bunny
She's my baby, I'm her honey
Never gonna let her go...

-John Prine, "In Spite of Ourselves"

[Lordathestrings]

Here it is, my rockabilly crapsterpiece...Kid, you are amazing!! 10's all across! :cool:

[Cryptic Excretions]

Good god, where does it come from? Seriously?

[crazywolf]

Ya, that was amazing.
Now, did you write just the lyrics or music go along with it too?

[Jolly McJollyson]

Ya, that was amazing.
Now, did you write just the lyrics or music go along with it too?
didn't actually write any music down, but I can hear it in my head.

[Jolly McJollyson]

Good god, where does it come from? Seriously?
I listen to too much music.

[Cryptic Excretions]

I listen to too much music.

Not possible. I listen to music anywhere from 80% - 100% of my days. I spent something like an hour and a half just cleaning my playlist just moments ago, which is up to about 5566 tracks. And most of it is metal... real metal. Oh, and good lyrics, I give them a clean 10 all the way through.

[iiholly]

When you guys gave it a ten, I hope it was like a ten on a scale of one million. :p Just kidding "Jolly". Pretty interesting parody.

Now don't get me wrong...
I'm honest on this
I'm no hypocritical evangelist

Like those lyrics a lot.

[Lordathestrings]

iiholly - the tao

were you before God?

[Akira]

You rock my world Jolly.

[Jolly McJollyson]

iiholly - the tao

were you before God?
Don't change the subject, this thread is about me and my rockingness!

[crazywolf]

Don't change the subject, this thread is about me and my rockingness!
And he's sooo modest
Oh so modest Jolly

[iiholly]

iiholly - the tao

were you before God?

sure, thats cool