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blvd_brkn_drms
05-11-2005, 09:26 PM
Here's a new song I just wrote that I'm hoping to put to music. Feedback is appreciated.
Clear
Jennifer
[Verse One]
Welcome to the dawning of a new day
The darkness is gone, the smoke has cleared
I can find my way
Welcome to the dawning of a new age
This is the new me, the old me is gone
Was just a stage
[Chorus]
The sun has brightened on my path
I know now how to do the math
My future is bright
And my sight
Is clear…
Clear…
[Verse Two]
Welcome to the dawning of a new year
The darkness has dissipated
The sunlight is here
Welcome to the dawning of my innocence
My dark stages is past me now
I got some sense
(CHORUS)
[Bridge]
The sunlight is shining down on me
The air is clear, now I can see
The air is so clear…
(CHORUS)
aschleman
05-12-2005, 07:23 AM
\m/ Rock on. Good lyrics... the flow was there and the rhyming scheme was there. I noticed that you are also from Indiana!? haha... sucks to be us!
goneguitaring
05-12-2005, 04:53 PM
hi i like yor song :o it is very intresting and what kind of instrument do u play ? I have to know i want to learn how to play guitar! :eek:
Jolly McJollyson
05-13-2005, 02:08 AM
Welcome to the dawning of a new day
Lemme guess, this line, or one of the similar lines was the first line you thought of, and then wrote the rest of the song around it. Had you just been listening to the song American Idiot by chance?
Cryptic Excretions
05-13-2005, 07:50 AM
Lemme guess, this line, or one of the similar lines was the first line you thought of, and then wrote the rest of the song around it. Had you just been listening to the song American Idiot by chance?
I was wondering if they wern't listening to In Flames' Dawn of a New Day.
Jolly McJollyson
05-13-2005, 02:26 PM
I was wondering if they wern't listening to In Flames' Dawn of a New Day.
Take a look at the username, my man. They may not dig "In Flames." Besides, you can't be inspired by lyrics you can't understand.
Cryptic Excretions
05-13-2005, 02:56 PM
Take a look at the username, my man. They may not dig "In Flames." Besides, you can't be inspired by lyrics you can't understand.
I missed the point behind the user name, and dawn of a new day was made in In Flames' nu-metal era where the vocals are a lot more clear. Besides, dawn of a new day is an acoustic song. Furthermore, you don't have to be able to understand the singer while he sings to understand the lyrics... obviously given you've read them.
Jolly McJollyson
05-13-2005, 03:02 PM
I missed the point behind the user name
"blvd_brkn_drms"
I walk a lonely road
etc etc.
Greenday's big hit off their new album.
x0o_BurnOut_o0x
05-15-2005, 08:24 AM
American Idiot and this song only slightly relate,
"Welcome to a new kind of tension"
"Welcome to the dawning of a new day"
The overall idea maybe is the same but I dont think they meant it that way.My song ironically has "welcome to the dawning..." and I can tell u i wasnt thinking American Idiot at the time.More like wtf has happened to the world? I think the reason it resembles several songs is because its alittle cliched which is why im removing it from my song.
Cryptic Excretions
05-16-2005, 08:20 AM
Ah, I've got it now... now that it's been blatently spelled out for me anyway.
crazywolf
05-22-2005, 01:41 PM
I thought the song was well written. It seems, imo, that path and math in the chorus sounded a little forced in the rhyme scheme.
If the song describes how you feel, congradulations man. Doesn't it feel amazing?!
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