my second song, way different then my first

[Portis_26]

this is a metallica inspired concept song. this is just the rhythym guitar and solo, the melody will be played on keyboards what my brother records it. its the one called "awaken"
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/rockfuisonmusic.htm
and if you dont like soundclick heres another one (dont know if its better but its a different one)
http://mixposure.com/song.php?songid=6815

if you get bored with the rhthym guitar, please just skip to 4:50 in the song because im not sure if my solo fits the song (1/3 of it was planned while the rest is kind of improvised so its sloppy, but i just want to know if its the right "feel").
thanks for the listen, hope you like it.

[Lordathestrings]

It's hard to tell what a finished song is going to sound like from listening to one track, but I have a couple of suggestions.

The tone settings for the rhythm track need to be moved up a bit. The bass should be rolled off a bit so that it won't disappear into the actual bass line when that is added to the mix.. You need to add more mids to give the guitar a voice to work with, and some more treble to keep it from getting lost behind the lead guitar.

[Jolly McJollyson]

As much as I love whole tone scales, that backing may not be the approriate one to play them over...

[rockonman]

Honestly...I'm not feeling the Metallica in that...it has potential, but I think it sounds too happy...somthing about the chords you use. I don't know I turned it up as loud as I could and I just couldnt get that headbanging drive out of it...ya know it just wasn't bonecrunchy enough...I'm by no means saying I could do better I'm just saying I didn't work for me as an individual...sorry dude.

[alucard0941]

Not to fond with the solo

[CW14]

To be honest, I didn't like it much.

But you've only been playing 3 months, so that aint bad.